Dialogue Examples for Students: A Comprehensive Guide
Dialogue is a fundamental element of storytelling, breathing life into characters and driving the narrative forward. It's the way characters interact, express themselves, and reveal their inner thoughts and feelings. Mastering the art of writing compelling dialogue is crucial for any aspiring writer. This article delves into the intricacies of dialogue, providing examples, formatting guidelines, and tips to help students craft engaging and realistic conversations.
The Power of Dialogue
Dialogue serves multiple purposes in a story. It's not just about characters talking; it's about what their words reveal.
- Characterization: Dialogue is a powerful tool for characterizing your characters. The way a character speaks - their vocabulary, tone, and rhythm - can reveal a lot about their personality, background, and motivations.
- Exposition: Dialogue can effectively convey background information and plot details. Instead of lengthy narrative descriptions, characters can reveal crucial information through their conversations. For example, a character might learn about an upcoming event by overhearing a conversation, or discover a secret through a whispered exchange.
- Immersion: Dialogue makes your writing feel more immersive and engaging. It breaks up long passages of prose and gives the reader something to “hear” other than the narrator's voice. It can also communicate subtext, hint at shared histories, and show class differences through vocabulary.
- Conflict: Conflict in dialogue can reveal a character’s core traits. Conversations can highlight simmering anger and unresolved issues, offering readers a glimpse of what drives each character.
Dialogue vs. Monologue
It's important to distinguish between dialogue and monologue. In contrast to dialogue, a monologue is a single, often lengthy passage spoken by one character. The character may be speaking directly to the reader or viewer, or they could be speaking to one or more other characters. Often, a character’s private thoughts are delivered via monologue. If you’re familiar with the term internal monologue, it’s referring to this. An internal monologue is the voice an individual (though not all individuals) “hears” in their head as they talk themselves through their daily activities. Your story might include one or more characters’ inner monologues in addition to their dialogue. Inner dialogue is the dialogue a character has inside their head. This inner dialogue can be a monologue. In most cases, inner dialogue is not marked by quotation marks. Outer dialogue is dialogue that happens externally, often between two or more characters.
Formatting Dialogue
Proper formatting is essential for clear and effective dialogue. Here are the key guidelines:
- Quotation Marks: In US English, dialogue goes inside double quotation marks (“dialogue”). Quoted dialogue within a line of dialogue goes inside single quotation marks (“I told my brother, ‘Don’t do my homework for me.’ But he did it anyway!”).
- New Paragraphs: Every time a new character speaks, start a new paragraph. This is true even when a character says only one word.
- Long Dialogue: When a character’s dialogue extends beyond a paragraph, use quotation marks at the beginning of the second and/or subsequent paragraph. Notice that only the final paragraph of her speech has quotation marks at the end of the quoted text. When a paragraph of dialogue does not have closing quotes, it lets the reader know that the same person is still speaking.
- Action Beats: You can separate a line of dialogue with an action. When you do this, capitalize the dialogue and action the same way you would capitalize any other sentence. “Every day,” he stated.
- Dialogue Tags: Dialogue tags are words like said and asked. While it’s good to have a variety of dialogue tags in your work, there’s also nothing wrong with using a basic tag like “said” when it’s the most accurate way to describe how a character delivered a line. You’ve probably come across more unconventional tags like “laughed” and “dropped.” If you use these at all, use them sparingly.
- Tag Placement: When the tag comes first, it's followed by a comma. After the comma is a space, followed by the quotation marks for the dialogue. Note that the punctuation at the end of the dialogue comes before the closing quotes. I rolled my eyes at the thought of having to answer this question for the millionth time. "In life, you'll learn there are many things that are out of our control," I retorted through the massive wails. When you choose to place your tag after the line of dialogue, the comma comes at the end of the spoken words, before the closing quotation marks. In this case, following the dialogue with a comma lets the reader know that there's more information to come. After the comma comes the quotation marks to end the dialogue, then a space, then the tag, followed by a closing period to complete the sentence. Doug made a short, chortling sound. Michael dropped his fork and aimed daggers at me. "Are you kidding me, Jill? I blinked at him, astonished. "Well, yes," I said. "I know that. "Girl, please," Doug retorted. "We thought you wanted us to keep the peace. Now that we know the misery he's caused you…" He paused, seeming to search for the right words. Note that the only exception to using a comma before the tag is when your quotation must end with a question mark or exclamation point.
- Internal Dialogue: For internal dialogue, you can use quotation marks or italics to set it off, depending on the situation.
Common Mistakes to Avoid
- Overusing Dialogue Tags: Using a tag for every piece of dialogue is redundant and breaks the reader’s flow. Once you’ve established that two characters are having a conversation, you don’t need to tag every piece of dialogue.
- Not Using Enough Tags: On the flip side, some writers use too few dialogue tags, which can confuse readers. Readers should always know who’s speaking.
- Dense, Unrealistic Speech: Dialogue doesn’t need to be grammatically correct. You want your characters to sound like real people. Real people don’t always speak in complete sentences or use proper grammar. That said, your dialogue needs to still be readable. If the grammar is so bad that readers don’t understand what your characters are saying, they’ll probably just stop reading your story.“I. Do. Not. WANT. See how the period after each word forces your brain to stop and read each word as if it were its own sentence? The periods are doing what they’re supposed to do; they just aren’t being used to end sentences like periods typically do. “Because no,” she said into the phone. “I need a bigger shed to store all my stuff in . . .
- Anachronisms: A pirate in 1700s Barbados wouldn’t greet his captain with “what’s up?” Depending on how dedicated you (and your readers) are to historical accuracy, this doesn’t need to be perfect.
- Eye Dialect: Eye dialect is the practice of writing out characters’ mispronunciations phonetically, like writing “wuz” for “was.” Eye dialect can be (and has been) used to create offensive caricatures, and even when it’s not used in this manner, it can make dialogue difficult for readers to understand.
Tips for Writing Effective Dialogue
- Give Each Character a Unique Voice: If there is more than one character with a speaking role in your work, give each a unique voice. Keep each character’s voice consistent throughout the story by continuing to write them in the style you established. When you go back and proofread your work, check to make sure each character’s voice remains consistent-or, if it changed because of a perspective-shifting event in the story, make sure that this change fits into the narrative and makes sense. One way to do this is to read your dialogue aloud and listen to it. “No, I’m not,” Ren answered.
- Cut the Filler: When you’re editing your characters’ dialogue, cut back all the parts that add nothing to the story. Real-life conversations are full of small talk and filler. Next time you read a story, take note of how little small talk and filler is in the dialogue. There’s a reason why TV characters never say “good-bye” when they hang up the phone: the “good-bye” adds nothing to the storyline.
- Show, Don't Tell: Instead of telling us about what a character is sure, nervous, or resentful of, you can make those qualities evident in what they say. A certain sort of character might answer quickly or deflect, while an unsure one might lie or offer more questions than answers. You can also include context of hinting-perhaps another character does something in response to an unexpected comment, or someone uses a nickname that suggests history. This allows the dialogue not just to define who the character is, but also how they exist in relationships with the world around them. It's generally more engaging to give little hints than to tell everything.
- Pair Dialogue with Physical Cues: Dialogue is most impactful when paired with physical cues. Use gestures and subtle actions to deepen the impact of what’s said (or left unsaid). These small cues add depth, creating a more immersive experience.
- Consider Character Development: As characters evolve, so should their dialogue. A character's dialogue changes as they face challenges, reflecting their growth over the course of the story. How much or how little a character "speaks" says a lot about them. A dialect can also reveal where they are from. Broken English or a stutter can also say a lot.
Examples from Literature
Analyzing examples from literature can provide valuable insights into crafting effective dialogue.
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"The Simplest Thing Would Be to Tear It Down": This example demonstrates how dialogue can immediately place the reader in the emotional heart of a discussion. Instead of a blow-by-blow account of their negotiations (what she needs done, when he’s free, how she’ll be paying), we’re dropped right into the emotional heart of the discussion. By starting off in the middle of (relatively obscure) dialogue, it takes a moment for the reader to orient themselves in the story and figure out who is speaking, and what they’re speaking about.
“The simplest thing would be to tear it down,” the man said.
She took this news as a blood-rush to the ears: a roar of peasant ancestors with rocks in their fists, facing the evictor. But this man was a contractor. Willa had called him here and she could send him away. She waited out her panic while he stood looking at her shambles, appearing to nurse some satisfaction from his diagnosis.
“It’s not a living thing. You can’t just pronounce it dead. Anything that goes wrong with a structure can be replaced with another structure.
“Correct. What I am saying is that the structure needing to be replaced is all of it. I’m sorry.
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"Pride and Prejudice" by Jane Austen: Austen's dialogue is witty, subtle, and packed with character. The colorful dialogue gives immediate insight into the dynamic between Mr. and Mrs. Bennet. The fact that Austen manages to imbue her dialogue with so much character-building realism means we hardly notice the amount of crucial plot exposition she has packed in here.
“My dear Mr.
“But it is,” returned she; “for Mrs.
“Why, my dear, you must know, Mrs. Long says that Netherfield is taken by a young man of large fortune from the north of England; that he came down on Monday in a chaise and four to see the place, and was so much delighted with it, that he agreed with Mr.
"The Power" by Naomi Alderman: This example uses a show, don’t tell approach to expositional dialogue. Within this short exchange, we discover a lot about Allie, her personal circumstances, and the developing situation elsewhere. We learn that women are being punished harshly for their powers; that Allie is expected to be ashamed of those powers and keep them a secret, but doesn’t seem to care to do so; that her father is successful in industry; and that she has a difficult relationship with him.
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“For smoking? Hunter says, “Your dad could use you in his factory.
She makes the silver flicker at the ends of her fingers again.
"Never Let Me Go" by Kazuo Ishiguro: This episode highlights the power of interspersing action beats within dialogue. These action beats work in several ways to add depth to what would otherwise be a very simple and fairly nondescript exchange. Firstly, they draw attention to the polo shirt, and highlight its potential significance in the plot. We learn through Tommy’s surprised reaction that he didn’t think Kathy knew how much he loved his seemingly generic polo shirt. This moment of recognition allows us to see that she cares for him and understands him more deeply than even he realized. Kathy breaking the silence before it can “humiliate” Tommy further emphasizes her consideration for him. Kathy and Tommy's relationship, built up through episodes like this one, provides the emotional undercurrent to the story.
“Tommy,” I said, quite sternly.
“So what?” he mumbled.
But even as he said this, he looked down and noticed the brown specks, and only just stopped himself crying out in alarm.
“It’s nothing to worry about.” I said, before the silence got humiliating for him. “It’ll come off.
"The Hobbit" by J.R.R. Tolkien: Tolkein’s dialogue for Gollum is a masterclass in creating distinct character voices. By using a repeated catchphrase (“my precious”) and unconventional spelling and grammar to reflect his unusual speech pattern, Tolkien creates an idiosyncratic, unique (and iconic) speech for Gollum.
"What have I got in my pocket?" he said aloud.
"Not fair! not fair!" he hissed.
Bilbo seeing what had happened and having nothing better to ask stuck to his question. "What have I got in my pocket?" he said louder.
"S-s-s-s-s," hissed Gollum. "Very well!
"Wrong," said Bilbo, who had luckily just taken his hand out again.
"The Great Gatsby" by F. Scott Fitzgerald: This dialogue is a great example of how to make dialogue sound natural. Gatsby tripping over his own words (even interrupting himself, as marked by the em-dashes) not only makes his nerves and awkwardness palpable but also mimics real speech. Fitzgerald also creates a distinctive voice for Gatsby by littering his speech with the character's signature term of endearment, “old sport”.
“Oh, it isn’t about that. At least -” He fumbled with a series of beginnings. “I thought you didn’t, if you’ll pardon my - you see, I carry on a little business on the side, a little side line, if you understand.
Sherlock Holmes by Arthur Conan Doyle: Sherlock cutting off Watson to launch into a monologue about his blood experiment shows immediately where Sherlock’s interest lies - not in small talk, or the person he is speaking to, but in his own pursuits, just like earlier in the conversation when he refuses to explain anything to John and is instead self-absorbedly “chuckling to himself”. Sherlock makes a strong impression both on John Watson and on the reader.
“How are you?” he said cordially, gripping my hand with a strength for which I should hardly have given him credit.
“Never mind,” said he, chuckling to himself. “The question now is about hemoglobin.
“Why, man, it is the most practical medico-legal discovery for years. Don’t you see that it gives us an infallible test for blood stains. Come over here now!” He seized me by the coat-sleeve in his eagerness, and drew me over to the table at which he had been working.
“Let us have some fresh blood,” he said, digging a long bodkin into his finger, and drawing off the resulting drop of blood in a chemical pipette. “Now, I add this small quantity of blood to a litre of water. You perceive that the resulting mixture has the appearance of pure water. The proportion of blood cannot be more than one in a million. I have no doubt, however, that we shall be able to obtain the characteristic reaction.” As he spoke, he threw into the vessel a few white crystals, and then added some drops of a transparent fluid. “Ha! ha!” he cried, clapping his hands, and looking as delighted as a child with a new toy.
Wallace: This scene is also a great example of the dramatic significance of people choosing not to speak. The exchange happens in front of a big group, but - despite their apparent discomfort - nobody speaks up to defend Wallace, or to criticize Ramon’s patronizing microaggressions.
Wallace hums. “Why would you do that?
"Hills Like White Elephants" by Ernest Hemingway: This example of dialogue moves at quite a clip. The conversation is a taut tennis match between the two speakers as they volley back and forth with short but impactful sentences, and unnecessary dialogue tags have been shaved off.
“Well,” the man said, “if you don’t want to you don’t have to. I wouldn’t have you do it if you didn’t want to.
“I think it’s the best thing to do.
“I love you now.
“I know.
“I’ll love it. I love it now but I just can’t think about it.
Circe: It also highlights Circe’s imperious attitude, a result of her divine status.
“I do. I narrowed my eyes.
“I am not asking for a story. You have come to my island.
A moment passed, and then he nodded.
"A Wrinkle in Time" by Madeleine L'Engle:
Calvin licked his lips. "Up."Charles continued his lecture. "On Camazotz we are all happy because we are all alike. Differences create problems.""Oh, yes, you do. You've seen at home how true it is. You know that you're not happy at school.
"Wuthering Heights" by Emily Brontë:
"Now he is here," I exclaimed. "For Heaven's sake, hurry down!"I must go, Cathy," said Heathcliff, seeking to extricate himself from his companion's arms.
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